2026届高三英语二轮复习讲义：第4部分　写作技能升华篇　专题2　读后续写　第2讲　微观把握　突破读后续写　（含解析）

这是一份2026届高三英语二轮复习讲义：第4部分　写作技能升华篇　专题2　读后续写　第2讲　微观把握　突破读后续写　（含解析），共17页。学案主要包含了动作描写，心理描写，对话描写，外貌性格描写，环境描写等内容，欢迎下载使用。
构思好续写情节以后，下一步就是进行续写。在阅卷时，阅卷老师首要关注的是续写的语言，因此续写语言的高低与否直接决定着续写的成功与否。首先要规避常见错误，确保拿到及格分，再次要尽力提升写作的语言，努力达到最高档。
一、动作描写
1．精准化
使用精准化动作类词汇对动作进行细致描写。用一系列小动作而不用大动作，或者用含义比较明确的动词而不用抽象或虚化的动词来描述，可以使描写更加具体生动。试比较下面两句：
①The little by said srry t his mther.
②The little by hung his head and mumbled an aplgy t his mther.
【解析】 句①中“said srry t”不带任何感情色彩，而句②中使用了具体化的表示“说”的动词mumbled，从而使一个不愿意道歉又不得不道歉的小男孩的形象栩栩如生地复现在读者脑海中。
2．过程化
记叙文中有不少动作描写是一连串动作过程的展示。尤其在展示人物个性的动作时，如果我们蜻蜓点水、一笔带过，就很难突出人物形象，也很难给人以深刻的印象，而通过细节描写展现出动作的过程，表现力就会大增。试比较下面两句：
①She went t catch the butterfly.
②She crept alng the path, bent ver swiftly and cupped her hands arund the butterfly gently.
【解析】 句①在描写主人公捕捉蝴蝶的动作时，没有细致的动作过程描写，因此显得很平淡。而句②使用了creep，bend ver，cup三个连贯的动词(短语)生动具体地描述了主人公小心翼翼捕捉蝴蝶的微妙过程，具有极强的画面感。因此，在续写过程中，在必要的地方恰当使用一连串的动词来表示过程，能为文章增添不少色彩。
3．修辞化
可以利用恰当的修辞手法来帮助描写动作。比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞手法都能让动作描写变得更有表现力。
(1)比喻
①The ld man's face wrinkled.
②The ld man's face was like a withered apple.
【解析】 句②使用了比喻手法，不说“皱起来”，而说“像一个枯萎的苹果”，使得对于脸部的描述更加生动形象。
(2)拟人
①My stmach was aching fr nt eating n time.
②My stmach was punishing me fr nt eating n time.
【解析】 句②使用了拟人手法，不说“疼痛”，而说“惩罚我”，更加生动有趣。
(3)夸张
①When she heard the bad news, she cried.
②When she heard the bad news, a river f tears pured ut.
【解析】 句②使用了夸张手法，不说“哭”，而说“泪流如河”，悲伤之情跃然纸上。
二、心理描写
1．落实“细微处”描写
在描写人物心理活动时，一定要突出细节，所有的感情都体现在“细微处”，所以尽量不用笼统的词，如smile，cry等，而用相关的细节性词汇或词组。如：
①Lily smiled happily.
②Lily wre a shining smile n her face.
【解析】 句①中“smiled”是一个笼统的描述微笑的词汇，而句②中使用了wre a shining smile，用词组的形式更加突出细节，展示了细微和精致的“微笑”。
2．体现“多样性”结构
在进行人物心理描写时，尽量避免平铺直叙，可以多采用如非谓语动词形式，从而使得描写到位，并体现语法结构的多样性。如：
①Her eyes were filled with tears, and she ffered her sincere thanks t the man.
②Tears filling her eyes, she ffered her sincere thanks t the man.
【解析】 句②把句①的“Her eyes were filled with tears”改成了独立主格结构“Tears filling her eyes”，更能显示出描写的细致，同时也体现了句式的多样化，展示了高超的语言运用能力。
3．展示“丰富化”修辞
除了选择细致的心理描写词汇和多样化的句式表达外，提升语言层次的另外一种方式是多使用修辞方法。如：
①The smile n her face shne like a diamnd.
②I feel like I am flating in an cean f sadness.
【解析】 句①把“微笑”比喻成“像钻石一样闪闪发光”，而句②把“悲伤”比喻成“漂浮在悲伤的海洋里”，展示了用修辞来体现细节描写的丰富。
三、对话描写
1．注重语言简洁
在对人物冲突进行具体的对话描写时，要注意语言简洁，切忌“长舌妇式”的语言重复。如：
① “What is the matter nw？What's wrng with yu？Is it OK with yu？What has happened t yu？”asked the wife.“Maybe I have made sme mistakes.I just can't remember why I cme back, and I just think where I am suppsed t be ging n such a ht summer day，” replied the prfessr.
② “What's wrng with yu？” asked the wife.“I just can't remember why I cme back and where I am suppsed t be ging n such a ht summer day，” replied the prfessr.
【解析】 句①中多次重复同一意思“你怎么了”，而句②中则简化了妻子的表达，对教授的回答也进行了缩减。
2．体现真实情感
在对人物进行对话描写时，真情实感是贴切人物的最好表达，尽量避免过于“高大上”或“假大空”，脱离人物的真实身份。如：
①“Yu have had a sund sleep！” the ld lady shuted.“It's time t pen yur eyes！We're in a risky situatin and we will have a big deal t make！”
②“What a rich lie！”Nancy thught after Jerry left.“Rich man always tells rich lies.He never tk yu t any places.And dn't let him charm yu.He betrayed us, yur belved father.He cast us ut.He cast us ut f his big fancy huse like we were nthing t him.He did it happily！”
【解析】 从句①中，我们不难发现作者对老妇人的真情实感的描写，体现了老妇人急迫的个性和对生活的不顺心而大发脾气的妇女形象。同时，结合三个感叹句，更好地体现了老妇人的急躁的心理。由此，读者也能够通过该对话，体会到语言的美感。句②中，我们可以发现Nancy的痛苦之处，深深地体会到了当时社会对底层老百姓的漠视和不公，同时我们也能够通过Nancy的话语，感受到她当时的愤怒之情，这就是对话语言的魅力所在。
3．注意描写比重
在对人物冲突进行具体的对话描写时，要注意其在文章段落中的比重问题，切忌以全对话或大部分对话代替其他细节描写。如：
“In the garden？” Sam asked nervusly.“I actually have given all I have t yu！S, please d nt hurt me r kill me.I beg yu！” Jessica als tld the thief, “D yu want all ur belngings？They are all in ur bedrm.I will lead yu t get them.Of curse, we are rich and we have a lt f mney.All will be given t yu if yu d nt hurt r kill us, please, please！” The thief said, “Of curse.I will nt kill yu t！OK.Yu are s gd.I will nt kill yu if I get this.Give all t me nw！” Just at that time, there was a knck at the dr and the plice came t the dr.
【解析】 从本段的描写中我们不难发现，几乎全段都是对话语言描写，而且话语多次重复和啰嗦，难以很好地表达主人公的内心情感，也难以让读者体会到英语语言的美。所以，在续写过程中，一定要读透文本，理解文本中的语言特色，然后相应地遵循原文续写，保持语言的一致性。
四、外貌性格描写
1．描写五官体形
在描写人物外貌时，要注意学会用不同的表达，对人物进行“从上到下”的细致刻画，包括发型装扮、脸部表情、身体状况、手脚情况、年龄状态等。如：
①Lking at his weather-wrn face, I was surprised.
②She is f medium height, very slim, but her face is as white as snw.
【解析】 句①中的weather-wrn face表示“饱经风霜的脸”；句②中medium height说明“中等身高”，as white as snw来说明“脸色惨白”。这两句中，通过扩展对人物具体外貌的修饰，达到了增加描写的作用。
2．突出人物情绪
对于人物的性格描写，一定要突出人物的个性，尽量避免用过于笼统的词，而应该采用相对比较细致的词汇或句式，来对人物进行“个性化”描写。如：
①He is gd-time Charlie, feeling n wrries and anxieties.
②Jerry is a self-pssessed man, whse face never betrays his emtins.
【解析】 句①中用gd-time Charlie来描述他的乐观，用词要比ptimistic更加形象；而句②中用self-pssessed 和never betrays his emtins 来细致描述杰里的个性，体现细节描写对人物个性的刻画。
3．采用并列表达
在进行人物外貌描写时，不一定是单一性的描写，而更多的可以采用并列式或递进式的表达方式。如：
The light shwed a pale, square-jawed face with keen eyes, and a little white scar near his left eyebrw.
【解析】 本句在描写人物外貌时，采用了with和and的并列或伴随结构，使得表达更加丰富。
五、环境描写
通过对环境的描写，能够向读者交代故事的背景，衬托人物，渲染气氛，从而推动情节发展。此外，作者可以通过环境描写向读者间接地表达故事中主人公的内心情感变化。环境描写分为客观和主观两种角度：客观描写从环境事物本身入手；主观描写则从观察者角度描写。通常在描写时主客观交替进行。原则上，主观描写比重可以稍大一点。
1．客观环境描写
客观环境的描写，常从环境本身入手，尽量突出“感官体验”，如强调“风雨雷电”或“花鸟虫鱼”等自然界所存在的事物本身，以及它们给人们带来的感受，如声音、气味、颜色、感觉、味道等。如：
①A cld breeze blew thrugh my hair.
② The water was deep blue and sunlight glittered n its lking glass-clear surface.
【解析】 句①描述的是风给我带来的感觉；句②则是视觉上的感受。
2．主观环境描写
主观环境描写则从观察者角度入手，表达“景物给人带来何种感受”，所以在表达上常是“我觉得……”“我看到……”。如：
①The beautiful scenery in the cuntryside kept me spellbund.
②Then I glanced up and saw a pair f kites, red with lng blue tails, saring in the sky.
【解析】 句①中的“景物使我如此陶醉”，描述的是美景给我的感受；句②中“我抬起头，望见两只红色的风筝，带着长长的蓝色尾巴，在天空中冉冉升起”也是从观察者的角度来写环境。
●真题体验
(2025·浙江1月卷)
Kevin was pretty bred.His mther was at wrk, and his father had been away n business.Therefre, he was left in the care f Mrs.Hill, an ld lady wh lived next dr.His parents had raised the 12-year-ld t be a gd by.He never gt int truble, thugh smetimes he wanted t d risky was asleep.Kevin sighed(叹息) and hped smething exciting wuld happen.Suddenly, a mvement utside caught his eye.
Mrs.Hill's frnt windw faced Mr.and Mrs.Green's huse acrss the street.The cuple had bth gne t wrk, s it was strange that smene was ver there.Kevin stared at the man at their frnt dr.Suddenly, the man jumped thrugh an pen windw int the huse.With his heart in his muth, Kevin grabbed Mrs.Hill's hme phne and called the plice.
Thinking that the man might get away with whatever he wanted befre the plice arrived, Kevin decided t d smething.He rushed ut f Mrs.Hill's huse and crssed the street quickly.Grabbing a branch frm a cut-dwn tree, he jumped in thrugh the windw.“Stp right there！Yu must leave right nw！” he called ut, hlding the branch with bth hands.
The man frze fr a secnd, but when he saw the skinny by he breathed a sigh f relief.“Hey, kid, put that dwn.It was my hme.My parents used t live here and my father's watch was here，” he explained, trying t lift a flrbard.
At that mment, the sunds f a plice car eched(回响) in the air.The man std up in a panic, then ran thrugh the huse tward the windw and jumped ut.Kevin fllwed ut and tld the arriving plice fficers what had happened.They pursued and arrested the man.
Kevin went back t Mrs.Hill's huse.Smehw he wasn't sure he had dne the right thing.“What if he has tld the truth？” he thught t himself.The man's wrds sunded pretty cnvincing.
注意：
1．续写词数应为150左右；
2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When Mr.and Mrs.Green gt hme, Kevin went t talk t them.
Kevin and Mr.Green tk the watch they had fund t the plice statin.
【解题示范】 第一步：精读短文，掌握关键信息。
本文人物为线索展开，讲述Kevin在父母不在家时，看到一男子闯入格林夫妇家，他报警并阻止男子，男子被捕后Kevin怀疑自己是否做对。
第二步：根据已知，构思续写思路。
1．由第一段首句内容“当格林夫妇回到家时，凯文去和他们交谈。”可以思考以下问题：Q1：Kevin 向 Green夫妇讲述这件事情时，Green夫妇有怎样的情绪波动？Q2：他们了解事情的经过后，有没有找到手表？
2．由第二段首句内容“凯文和格林先生带着他们找到的手表去了警察局。”可以思考以下问题：
Q1：他们到达警察局后和警察进行了怎样的交流？Q2：Kevin最后的心情如何？
第三步：结合情景，添加具体细节。
1．续写第一段应描写Green夫妇对这件事情的态度和对Kevin 的表现的评价，原文提到男子试图抬起一块地板，所以还应描写Green夫妇对这一情况的验证，最后根据续写第二段提示句可以判断，他们找到了手表。
2．续写第二段应重点描述两人和警察之间的交流和警察的回应，以及最后Kevin如释重负的心情。
第四步：拟写草稿，修改错词病句。
在搭建好写作框架和基本内容后，开始着手打草稿，对罗列的要点进行重新筛选和整合，适当拓展要点，尽量使用表意准确、形象生动、符合以英语为母语的人的习惯表达方式的高级词汇，同时应注意长短句结合，让句式灵活多变，以体现考生深厚的语言功底，使文章更出彩。
第五步：润色成篇，规范誊写文章。
在誊写文章时，还需要对语言进行修饰、润色，恰当运用衔接手段，以使文本紧凑流畅。
【优秀作文赏析】
When Mr.and Mrs.Green gt hme, Kevin went t talk t them. He explained hw he had witnessed the strange man entering their huse and hw he was Mrs.Green listened attentively, with a mixture f surprise and gratitude n their hugged Kevin, thanking him fr his , hwever, lked thughtful.He asked Kevin t describe the man in detail and then revealed that the man was indeed his yunger brther, wh had cme t retrieve a watch their father had left behind.Kevin's eyes widened in shck.
Kevin and Mr.Green tk the watch they had fund t the plice statin. On the way, Mr.Green explained that the watch was a family heirlm, passed dwn frm generatin t generatin.At the plice statin, they explained the situatin t the fficers, wh were surprised but understanding.The man, wh had been released after his identity was verified, was waiting utside.He smiled weakly at Kevin, wh felt a mix f embarrassment and handed ver the watch t his brther with a pat n the back, and they all agreed t keep in tuch.Kevin learned an imprtant lessn that day：always verify the facts befre taking actin, but never hesitate t help thse in need.
(2025·广东省深圳市高三一模)
The car turned nt the familiar rad that led t Grandma's farm.“Jude, this summer hliday will be a great chance fr yu t stay with yur grandma，” Dad said as he drve.Every mment, we were mving farther away frm the city, the place where I knew hw t d things right.
The car engine wasn't ff befre Grandma hugged me.I slwly dragged myself ut f the car.“Jude, yu lk unhappy.Why？” Grandma asked.She acted like nthing bad had happened last time.Culd I ask hw much mney her neighbr Mr.Jacksn had lst because f my mistake？Was he still upset with me？“I'm fine，” I answered.“I'm just missing my cmputer camp.Cmputers are smething I'm gd at.” “That sunds disappinting，” Grandma ndded.
I liked visiting the farm during breaks befre I messed things up last summer.Grandma lived alne, and Mr.Jacksn was like family t her.Then ne day I frgt t lck the gate and let the gats int his flwer beds.He lst almst all his rses fr the farmers' market.
Nw, back at the farm, I felt nervus.I was trying t hide in the rm when I saw Mr.Jacksn！He was pening the dr and calling Grandma.“I need help！” he yelled t her.“Just a secnd fr the freshly harvested rses！” That was when he saw me.I felt my heart tighten and was ready fr his criticism.I deserved it.He had prbably been waiting fr this mment since last summer.
Hwever, Mr.Jacksn greeted me happily, “Great, Jude is here！Yur grandma always tells us yu are a wnderfully cmpetent(有能力的) cmputer prgrammer.” I shk my head.“I am nt cmpetent.I am srry I messed things up.” He was surprised and cmfrted me, “It was an accident.Being cmpetent desn't mean yu never make mistakes.”
I lked ut f the windw.There were piles f rses waiting t be sld.“Jude, can yu help us？We want t sell rses nline.We have a cmputer and all the parts(零件)fr ur internet cnnectin, but we just can't set it up，” Grandma asked.N internet.They seemed t live in the twentieth century.
注意：
1．续写词数应为150左右；
2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Maybe I culd be smene wh was really cmpetent.
Within a few hurs, rders fr rses flded in.
【范文】
Maybe I culd be smene wh was really cmpetent. “I can definitely help with that！Where are the parts？” Fllwing Grandma, I went int the rm, where a cmputer sat surrunded by sme scattered parts.Rlling up my sleeves, I carefully cnnected everything.It was a piece f cake t me.“Dne！” I annunced cnfidently.After a few adjustments, the Internet was up and running.Nw it was time t sell the rses.I decided t start frm my scial media platfrm.I quickly upladed phts, added descriptins, and set prices.Befre lng, ntificatins started shwing up—peple were nticing.My abilities made a difference!
Within a few hurs, rders fr rses flded in. “This is amazing, Jude！” Grandma cheered with jy as she began bustling abut, packing chuckled warmly as he handed me anther bunch t label.The energy was electric—everyne was n their feet, mving quickly t keep up with the grwing rders.The farm felt alive, and s did I．T ur surprise, the rses sld ut in just half a day.“Yu've brught the farm int the twenty-first century, Jude，” Grandma hugged me tightly.I realized that being cmpetent wasn't abut aviding mistakes.It was abut facing them head-n and making the mst f my strengths.
※小贴士：读后续写失分点
1．时间不够用，无法认真、顺利完成“理解—构思—表达”全过程。
2．违背逻辑常识，情节和细节的想象要合理，符合生活常识的同时做到逻辑性强。
3．用过多的对话，在续写中使用对话，虽然能够丰富内容和语言、增强语篇的连贯性，但是过多使用对话会显得累赘，冲淡需要突出的主要情节。
4．词数不够(词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分)，情节过于肤浅，描写不详细，人物对话不到位。
5．续写内容与文章主旨不符合，故事情节与上文不连贯，没能充分考虑到所给的段落提示句对续写故事的发展的提示、衔接、引导和一定程度地限制作用。有的甚至瞎编乱造，不顾及上文各情节之间的逻辑关系。
6．语言基本功欠缺，语法结构错误，词汇贫乏，人称混乱，时态混用。
7．表达内容不丰富，语言能力不强，缺乏可读性。
8．书写不规范，字迹不工整，难识别。